2011年9月6日 星期二
Family Background
My name is Yao , Shih-Wei. There are four members in my family, including my parents, my elder brother and me. My father is an engineer on machinery. He always goes to work early, and comes back late. Therefore, I don’t have many chances to see him. But when he is at home, he will teach us that haste makes waste. He hopes that we can think twice before we handle affairs. He doesn’t want to see us correct an error again and again. My mother is a hairdresser as well as a housewife. She has to give consideration to us and her customers. Though it is tiring and often makes her exhausted, she never complains. My elder brother is a college student. He is the person who understands me most. Every time he comes back, he always talks to me about his personal experiences. He is my best teacher.
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Every time感覺有點怪怪的...
回覆刪除改成whenever比較好~~
He doesn’t want to see us correct an error again and again.
回覆刪除呃...
你是要說"他不想看見我們一再的犯錯"嗎?
要不要換個更直白的說法比較好??
這句也超怪
Every time he comes back, he always talks to me about his personal experiences.
沒有連接詞喔...
改成Whenever he comes back~
比較好吧
1.Shih-Wei, Yao
回覆刪除2.He always goes to work early, and comes back late.→He works hard and responsibly. He goes to work in the early morning, and comes home late every day.
3.He doesn’t want to… an error…→the same error
4.來個小結論吧^__^
First,你的背景真是帥到讓我瘋掉~~~~特特
回覆刪除那個小傢伙真幸福=V=
I don’t have many chances to see him. 要是我的話我會寫I don't have many chances to get along with him.
He doesn’t want to see us correct an error again and again.這句是.....啥???
My mother is a hairdresser as well as a housewife.你媽媽是兩個嗎??應該改為
My mother is a hairdresser as well as housewife.
ㄜ.....似乎沒看到結論句......