2011年4月20日 星期三
I like to read comic books.
Though, many elders think that comic books are worthless. But in my view, I think comic books are important and useful. There are some reasons why I say that. First of all, I can have a conversation with other people by comic books. We can talk some ideas of comic books and discuss what character we like. Maybe we will become good friend in the end, such as Amber, who is my best friend. We always share our comic books with each other. Moreover, I can learn lots of things that I don’t know. For instance, I learn how to mix a glass of delicious drink. A drink can mix a variety of drinks. When I read Japanese comic books, I can learn many vocabularies and grammar. Also, I can get the latest information about their country. Last and most important, I can relax when I concentrate my attention to read comic books. I don’t need to think annoying things. What I need to do is follow my emotions. If the character meets some villains and gets hurt, I will very angry and want to help the character. The character is happy, and so is I. From what I have said, comic books are my spiritual food. And I really like to read them.
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First of all, I can have a conversation with other people by comic books.
回覆刪除＂by＂，我會想用＂about＂。
We can talk some ideas of comic books...
＂talk＂，我想用＂exchange＂。
Maybe we will become good friend...
＂friend＂要加＂s＂吧。
For instance, I learn how to mix... A drink...
在下想把二句寫這樣：
For instance, I learn how to blend multiple ingredients into a delicious drink.
I can relax when I concentrate my attention to read comic books.
＂concentrate＂，我想用＂pay＂。
The character is happy, and so is I.我會想寫：
If the character is happy, I will feel the same.
（看到混合飲料那邊，
使我聯想到「甘甜奶茶」…）
如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。
We can talk some ideas of comic books and discuss what character we like.
回覆刪除character是不是要加s阿
Maybe we will become good friend in the end
應該是friends
I can relax when I concentrate my attention to read comic books
應該是 concentrate~on reading
The character is happy, and so is I
這邊應該是 so am I吧
First of all, I can have a conversation with other people by comic books.
回覆刪除by改成about會不會比較好
by感覺後面接的要是會動的東西@@
But in my view, I think comic books are...
回覆刪除這邊我覺得你前面已經有一個in my view了，所以後面的I think可以刪掉。
We can talk...and discuss what character we like.這邊我覺得what 要改成which
For instance, I learn how to mix a glass of delicious drink. A drink can mix a variety of drinks.這一段我覺得飲料的詞可以換個說法...
是說一個飲料可以混合各種飲料到底是在說些什麼阿同學..
以上。
But in my view,
回覆刪除感覺怪怪的欸
換成in my opinion會不會好一點?
...other people...
只用others的話呢?
... discuss what character we like...
用discuss which character we like
For instance, I learn how to mix...
改成
For instance, I can learn how to mix
以上...
Though, many elders think that comic books are worthless. But in my view, I think comic books are important and useful.這兩具是不是合併起來比較好呢?
回覆刪除Maybe we will become good friend的freind要加s
concentrate my attention to read comic books應該改成concentrate my~on reading~
The character is happy, and so is I
應該是so am I
例子舉的不錯~
1.Though, many elders think that comic books are worthless. But in my view, I think comic books are important and useful.
回覆刪除→Though many elders think that comic books are worthless; however, in my opinion, I think comic books are important and useful.
2. First of all, I can have a conversation with other people by comic books.
→ First of all, I can have a conversation with other people about comic books.
3.I learn how to mix a glass of delicious drink.
→(不曉得怎麼改…，總之覺得不太通順呢。)
4.The character is happy, and so is I.
→+點連接詞或副詞比較順
(以上，淺見…)
First of all, I can have a conversation with other people by comic books.
回覆刪除by改成about比較好吧
Maybe we will become good friend in the end
friend要加s
and so is I
是so am I
Though, many elders think that comic books are worthless.
回覆刪除我覺得Though可以不用
"what character" we like.
這裡應該用which characters