John Adams and Thomas Jefferson are two important Americans. Interestingly, they have some similar in common. For instance, both John Adams of Thomas Jefferson died on July 4, 1826. Furthermore, John Adams played important role in American Revolution. Similarly, Thomas Jefferson was an important in the American Revolution. They studied and practiced law; in the end, they also delegate to the Continental Congress. John Adams was a signer of Declaration of Independence, and was Thomas Jefferson. Most importantly, they both were president of United States
they have some similar in common.
回覆刪除應該是similarities
John Adams played important role in American Revolution.
少了an
Thomas Jefferson was an important in the American Revolution.
important後面要加個person吧
They studied and practiced law; in the end, they also delegate to the Continental Congress
這邊用in the end 好像不太適合
John Adams was a signer of Declaration of Independence, and was Thomas Jefferson.
後面應該是and so was Thomas Jefferson
Most importantly, they both were president of United States.
應該是Most important, they were both presidents of United States.
they have some similar in common.
回覆刪除similar要改成名詞similarity哦
For instance, both John Adams of Thomas Jefferson died on July 4, 1826.
這句的of是不是要打成and打錯啦?
1.Interestingly, they have some similar in common.
回覆刪除→Interestingly, they have some similarities in common.
2.John Adams played important role in American Revolution.
→John Adams played an important role in American Revolution.
3.Similarly, Thomas Jefferson was an important in the American Revolution.
→Similarly, Thomas Jefferson was an important person in the American Revolution.
4.Most importantly, they both were president of United States.
→Most importantly, they both were the president of United States.
(以上，淺見…)
they have some similar in common
回覆刪除→similar是形容詞哦
John Adams played important role應該是played an important role哦
similar不太對欸
回覆刪除an important in the American Revolution
是an important什麼東西阿(汗
我覺得將整篇的時態改成
回覆刪除過去式比較好喔~~~
similar的用法
也錯得太離譜了吧!!!!
they have some similar in common改成similiarities比較好
回覆刪除Adams played important role要加an
Jefferson was an important in the American Revolution這句important後面是不是漏字了
they also delegate to the Continental Congress
→they were both delegates to ~
For instance, both John Adams "of" Thomas Jefferson died on July 4, 1826.
回覆刪除這裡是and吧!
in the end, they also "delegate" to the Continental Congress.
是過去式delegated
John Adams was a signer of Declaration of Independence, and " " was Thomas Jefferson.
這裡少了so
＂similar＂的問題大家都講過了。（張望）
回覆刪除For instance, both John Adams of Thomas Jefferson
為什麼是＂of＂……？是＂and＂才對吧。
Furthermore, John Adams played important role ...
建議在＂played＂後面加個＂an＂，
因為＂play an important role＂是固定用法。
再一次地，＂an important＂的問題前面也提了。
; in the end, they also delegate...and was...
＂delegate＂看法跟品婷君一樣。
＂was＂同芳珠君。
Although both of them passed away, their spirits still lived on.
個人偏愛把前句改為完成式，即＂have passed away＂。
姚姚自己斟酌吧。
如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。
*John Adams and Thomas Jefferson are two important Americans. 這句我會改成John Adams and Thomas Jefferson are two important persons of United States.
回覆刪除* For instance, both John Adams of Thomas Jefferson died on July 4, 1826. OF應該要改成AND吧
*Similarly, Thomas Jefferson was an important in the American Revolution.這句話少了受詞。
*John Adams was a signer of Declaration of Independence, and was Thomas Jefferson.WAS前面加個SO吧!
*Most importantly要改成Most important of all
*最後，結論句寫的真好^_^