Everyone likes to keep a good figure. But, the precondition is that you have a healthy body. Actually, if you the follow below steps, you can stay healthy easily. First of all, get up earlier, and jog or stroll in the park. Doing exercise in the morning can make you keep in a good mood. And don’t forget to drink water if you feel thirsty. It is enough to drink about one thousand and five hundred c.c.. Second, fruit has to appear in every meal. More fruit you eat, more vitamins you can get. Last but not least, you always have a good mood.
To sum, follow this steps can stay healthy easier.
Actually, if you the follow below steps,...
回覆刪除"the"和"follow"應該掉換一下位置。
Second, fruit has to appear in every meal.
我會寫寫：
…filling half your plate with vegetables or fruit at each meal.
Last but not least, you always have a good mood.
在下覺得"you"和"always"中間加上"should"可能比較順。
To sum, follow this steps can stay healthy easier. 我想改三個地方：
To sum up, follow these steps and you can stay healthy.
如果把「飲水」一事另立作第二點，不知可行與否？
如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。
But, the precondition is that you have a healthy body.
回覆刪除我絕得這句在have之前加個should會比較好
因為前面提到的precondition是前提~~
Actually, if you the follow below steps,
很明顯地!!!!!
follow 和 the的順序錯了哦XD
if you the follow below steps
回覆刪除follow 和 the順序是不是搞錯了?
the precondition is that you "have to" have a healthy body 我覺得這樣好像會比較好
you "should" always have a good mood. 這樣好像比較好
感覺怪怪的@口@
回覆刪除Doing exercise in the morning can make you keep in a good mood.
Last but not least, you always have a good mood.
這兩句好像重複了
或者你可以把為什麼要有個好心情的原因多講一點
First of all, get up earlier, and jog or stroll in the park.
這句感覺很侷限
要不要多加一點不同的運動
也不要刻意選在公園
(只是意見啦<汗)
應該是the following steps吧
回覆刪除take a stroll比較好
And don’t forget to drink water if you feel thirsty.這句是.....廢話嗎??<<不要傷心...
我覺得fruits are necessary .....比較好耶~~
Last but not least, you "should" always have a good mood.
To sum, "following" this steps can stay healthy easier.
就醬!!掰~~
p.s.我要撐死你的魚→
回覆刪除XDDDDDDDD
if you "the follow" below steps
回覆刪除順序錯了~
文章中提到make you keep in a good mood
還有Last but not least, you always have a good mood.
感覺起來會重複到兩個一樣的東西
1.Actually, if you the follow below steps, you can stay healthy easily.
回覆刪除→Actually, if you the steps below, you can stay healthy easily.
2.More fruit you eat, more vitamins you can get.
→The more fruit you eat, the more vitamins you will get.
3.Last but not least, you always have a good mood.
→這句有點突兀…如果是我會想在後面+must
4.To sum, follow this steps can stay healthy easier.
→In sum, follow this steps and you can stay healthy easier.
(以上，淺見…)