2011年6月9日 星期四
Discussing effects II
Acton is a small town in the Midwest . It has a population of 2500, and the town has not changed very much in the past 100 years. Last month, Stanley Manufacturing decided to open a large factory in Acton . If I had been the inhabitant in Acton , I would have approved this plan. There are some positive impacts on Acton . First of all, it will promote the economic prosperity. For instance, people have more jobs and earn more money to support their family. Secondly, they have more choice of entertainments. They no longer rise up with the sun, and rest with the sunset. Their nightlife becomes more brilliant. Maybe they can go to the night markets or pubs. Finally, people can contact with another area people frequently. The more they contact, the more latest information they can get. Therefore, opening the new factory is good to Acton people.
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people have more jobs and earn more money to support their family要不要加上can比較好阿
回覆刪除Secondly, they have more choice of entertainments為什麼蓋工廠之後他們就能逛夜市和去夜店?
The more they contact有種怪怪的感覺
is good to Acton people改成people in Acton
people have more jobs and earn more money
回覆刪除是much money吧!!
對阿為什麼蓋工廠後就能逛夜市和去夜店?
你的邏輯好怪捏
回覆刪除其實裡面很多點
都不成立= =
你的思想...
回覆刪除嗯...
很詭異...
為什麼有工廠就會連帶有夜市之類的東西阿
蓋工廠不會有pub可以去ㄟ同學^口^
回覆刪除日出而作日落而息好神奇阿^_^
people can contact with "another area people" frequently
回覆刪除我會想寫"people from another area"
the more "the" latest information they can get
opening the new factory is good "to" Acton people.
應該是for
They no longer rise up with the sun, and rest with the sunset.
我覺得這一句換別得比較好~= =
1.For instance, people have more jobs and earn more money to support their family.
回覆刪除﹡family我想改成families
2.Finally, people can contact with another area people frequently.
﹡Finally, people can contact other people in another area frequently.(第二次囉,with要刪調。)
﹡以上,淺見…
The more they contact, the more latest information they can get.
回覆刪除latest前面要加the噢
同上....
有些東西真的怪怪的@@
For instance, people have more jobs...
回覆刪除想修改為"job opportunities..."。
They no longer rise up with ...
可否修改為:
"They no longer work overtime..."
※「日出而作,日落而息」表示規律的生活。
The more they contact, the more latest information they can get.
在下會將"more"換成"much"。
雖然姚姚的雷多觀點有時候很奇怪…
這就是所謂妖精的「創意」嗎。
如有誤,請不吝嗇指教。